Beds: The Haiku

From time to time, our good friend rumpydog issues a blog poetry challenge.  The form this time was haiku.

Haiku is an ancient Japanese discipline – a seventeen-syllable poetic sketch, in three phrases of five, seven, and five syllables.  The general idea, also, is that there’s a “kiru,” the concept of a “cut,” somewhere in there, to separate two elements that have been juxtaposed.

Can you find the kiru?

White cat sleeps on sill
Gray cat slumbers in East Bed
Quiet here.  For now.

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Anita loves cats. This must be because she, too, has had nine lives. She’s been dancing since she could walk, she was a commercial artist and advertising producer, she earned a third-degree black belt in Aikido, she is a drummer with the Afrique Aya Dance Company, she is an attorney, and she’s a meditator and a devoted student of Nonviolent Communication. She also spent one lifetime sidelined with a devastating back injury in 1992. Since then – FELDENKRAIS METHOD® to the rescue. The FELDENKRAIS METHOD is all about dreaming concretely – thinking intelligently and independently by way of a gracious and kind physicality. The work affords all who study it a process by which to reach, with movement, into the mind and the heart, to make nine lives into one whole being.
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17 Responses to Beds: The Haiku

  1. lahgitana says:

    “now” as kiru?

  2. nadbugs says:

    Well — that was over fast. So let me throw in a lagniappe (look it up): Jewish haiku. From wikipedia:

    The sparkling blue sea
    beckons me to wait one hour
    after my sandwich.

    On a graver note, I was surprised to read that the Shema — one of the most serious Jewish prayers of them all — also scans like haiku.

    She-ma Yis-ra-el,
    A-do-nai E-lo-hei-nu,
    A-do-nai E-chad

    Hear, O Israel
    The Lord our G-d
    The Lord is One.

    The ridiculous to the sublime.

  3. We love Haiku and oy, who knew it could work in Hebrew?

  4. rumpydog says:

    I didn’t find it… but then, I don’t write good poetry… just poetry!

    • nadbugs says:

      Nah, Rumpy — it’s not about your abilities — it’s about subtlety so extreme, it has a tendency to vanish into the white space. That’s to say, it’s not about what’s said, but what’s unsaid, in the white space, which is emptiness –

      This is way too much zen. Time to go to bed. You just keep doing what you do. You are fabulous just as you are. Don’t ever change.

  5. Daisy says:

    Sight of Bugs and Fang
    In peaceful, sep’rate slumber
    Brings joy to my heart

    (Don’t know if this has the “kiru,” but as long as I can fit something that makes sense in five-seven-five syllables–my bar is set very low, thank you–I’m fine with it, hehehe.)

    • nadbugs says:

      Ai-eeeee!!! So excellent! And who cares about the kiru, when you rocked the 5-7-5 like this AND made it scan with that kind of groove?? Completely awesome. A low bar? I think NOT!

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