From time to time, our good friend rumpydog issues a blog poetry challenge. The form this time was haiku.
Haiku is an ancient Japanese discipline – a seventeen-syllable poetic sketch, in three phrases of five, seven, and five syllables. The general idea, also, is that there’s a “kiru,” the concept of a “cut,” somewhere in there, to separate two elements that have been juxtaposed.
Can you find the kiru?
White cat sleeps on sill
Gray cat slumbers in East Bed
Quiet here. For now.
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“now” as kiru?
Absolutely. You brilliant gal, you.
Well — that was over fast. So let me throw in a lagniappe (look it up): Jewish haiku. From wikipedia:
The sparkling blue sea
beckons me to wait one hour
after my sandwich.
On a graver note, I was surprised to read that the Shema — one of the most serious Jewish prayers of them all — also scans like haiku.
She-ma Yis-ra-el,
A-do-nai E-lo-hei-nu,
A-do-nai E-chad
Hear, O Israel
The Lord our G-d
The Lord is One.
The ridiculous to the sublime.
Love it!!!! 🙂
Smiling back at you. Hello. CATachresis! Right?
How did that happen? Yeah right, CATachresis 🙂
We love Haiku and oy, who knew it could work in Hebrew?
One Lord — after all. . . . even — especially — in Hebrew!
Works for me 😉
Very nice!
Thank you!
So pretty!
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I didn’t find it… but then, I don’t write good poetry… just poetry!
Nah, Rumpy — it’s not about your abilities — it’s about subtlety so extreme, it has a tendency to vanish into the white space. That’s to say, it’s not about what’s said, but what’s unsaid, in the white space, which is emptiness —
This is way too much zen. Time to go to bed. You just keep doing what you do. You are fabulous just as you are. Don’t ever change.
Sight of Bugs and Fang
In peaceful, sep’rate slumber
Brings joy to my heart
(Don’t know if this has the “kiru,” but as long as I can fit something that makes sense in five-seven-five syllables–my bar is set very low, thank you–I’m fine with it, hehehe.)
Ai-eeeee!!! So excellent! And who cares about the kiru, when you rocked the 5-7-5 like this AND made it scan with that kind of groove?? Completely awesome. A low bar? I think NOT!